Saturday, December 03, 2005

a senryu

unopened note
on the cold kitchen table
door slamming

11 comments:

J.B. Rowell said...

Perfect poem - stark and powerful.

Pris said...

Thanks!

inlow said...

That's nice

regards

Geoff Sanderson said...

a cold, sad senryu Pris - perfect.

PS I hope that wasn't Lloyd slamming the door, leaving a note saying 'I just can't fix your ####### computer any more - threw it in the garbage!'

Pris said...

hi doug
thanks. lloyd and I opened up his blog after the install and found your comment...said he'd commented on yours. We're both glad to see you back.

geoff
Actually the note said....oh, can't reveal.:-) and thanks.

Michael Parker said...

Yes, this is good. Hope you have seen the last of the computer problems.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I like it --- it leaves so much to the imagination -- I need to work on such things
andrew

Pris said...
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Pris said...

Oops..typos in the above...

Michael...me, too!

and Andrew, I've been posting on Haiku Hut for probably four years now and am still learning haiku and senryu. As you well know, it's harder to write well than anyone can imagine before trying.

Brian Campbell said...

To the point! Love it!

I just checked out haiga pages and will put the link on my website soon. Thanks.

Pris said...

Hi Brian
Thanks!